Newly Written Poem

Hey, hey, people. As some of you may or may not know, I write poetry occasionally in my free time. Basically, I get an idea in my head, and I am just sort of thinking about it for a while. Keep in mind that I don't know I'm going to have a poem while I'm thinking about this stuff. Then, I'll describe the event in some way and it will come across in my head as something poetic. Then I'll find a type of poem I feel up to writing and write it.

In any case, I've recently written another poem, in this case, a haiku, and I thought I would share it with you all.

EDIT: Thanks to you two who responded (Matt and Kit) and you both were right, I do have 6 syllables in the first line. The revised poem is now above the original. Thanks again.

Non-Reciprocated Love

The love is one-way
I love her and she shuns me
My mistress is sleep

I left my blunder on the original if you were curious to know what it was.

Non-Reciprocated Love

With her love is one-way

I love her and she shuns me

My mistress is sleep

I'm also posting it here to get some feedback on it. I mean, the idea that I'm trying to get across in the poem is simply that I don't sleep well. How well did that come across? Also, how did you think the subtlety of the last line was? My mom thought it was a little to direct, but I don't know, I think the direct approach somehow fits.

I'll think on it.

~Tyler